Rein
New Member
Why so serious?
Posts: 4
|
Post by Rein on Mar 23, 2012 17:03:37 GMT -5
PERMANENT FILE
NAME: Suki Ikeda AGE: 16 1/2 GENDER: Female SEXUALITY: Straight OCCUPATION: N/A SOCIAL STATUS: Courtswoman
HEIGHT: 5'8" WEIGHT: 147 lbs FACE CLAIM: Suki Ikeda
PERSONALITY TRAITS: -Defensive -Genuine -Kind/Generous -Hard Worker -Friendly -Well-spoken
ABOUT PAST EVENTS: There isn't much to tell about Suki. Her parents are rich and live in a fancy mansion. Not to mention the abundant of maids and butlers. Yes, I suppose Suki lives "high on the hog". Despite this, that just isn't what Suki likes. She hates dressing up, almost as much as going to meetings and conferences. So, she usually just runs off around town and visits the Blacksmith. He has offered her a job several times, but she's had to turn him down, ripping out her heart every time.
SECRETS: -She loves children -She is adopted (Suki does not know this) -Sometimes, she gets in fancy dresses and twirls about her room. Of course, they will come off in seconds afterwards LIKES & DISLIKES: -Likes= Art, Music, Hunting, Traveling, Meeting new people, The Rain, Cold Weather, The Nighttime -Dislikes= Bossy-boots, Summer, Elegance, Cleanliness, Her Room
application was passed by Rein [/color]
|
|
|
Post by ' Toxic on Mar 23, 2012 19:36:14 GMT -5
Okay, well, a few things.
1- To make it look a little more neat, you can see here the template for your character. At the bottom of that page there is a code. Just copy and paste that into this thread and fill it out instead of making your own.
2- You'll need to find an actual character that is from an anime. You cannot use the same name for face claim and your own. A face claim tells you what character you are using to represent your own, as far as *looks* go. You can look to the accepted bios for an example if you still don't understand, or ask me.
3- Try not to power play other characters in your writing. In your past events, it tells of a blacksmith "ripping her heart out". I don't know if you were referring to Kaito, the farrier, but if he is someone not played and just a background character (as I like to call them), then state so.
Please fix these things so I can accept you, thanks! ^^
|
|